(Ladybirds in Winter)
"Clustering like blackberries in the top right corner of the bedroom window, they huddle against the cold running through the complex like an oversugared child."
The opening line is captivating, immediately drawing the reader's attention to the image of blackberries clustering in an unusual but vivid setting. The comparison to an "oversugared child" adds a sense of movement and energy to the otherwise stationary berries, making the scene more dynamic.
"Their diminutive armour ready for anything. A phalanx of ancient Greek hoplites."
The use of the word "armour" to describe the blackberries' outer layer creates a sense of protection and resilience. Comparing them to ancient Greek hoplites adds an interesting historical reference and imbues the berries with a sense of strength and unity.
"Now is the time for the diapause, to let everything be suspended between seasons."
The mention of diapause introduces a sense of pause and anticipation, reflecting the momentary stillness in nature during transitions between seasons. This line adds depth to the poem, hinting at the theme of waiting and preparing for change.
"Pink grapefruit sunlight is caught like a spirit level bubble."
The description of the sunlight as "pink grapefruit" is a delightful use of color imagery, painting a vibrant picture of the light's hue. The simile comparing the sunlight to a "spirit level bubble" creates a unique and intriguing comparison, enhancing the magical and ethereal atmosphere of the poem.
"The insects, like my bones, take it as a sign to wait, let things ripen and begin anew."
The parallel drawn between the insects and the speaker's bones adds a personal touch to the poem, tying the natural world to the human experience. The idea of waiting for things to ripen and begin anew further reinforces the theme of patience and renewal.
In summary, your poem is a beautiful blend of vivid imagery, historical references, and contemplative themes. It transports the reader to a captivating scene where nature and human experiences intertwine. The use of poetic devices and strong visual language makes the poem engaging and evocative. Well done! |
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| Author BIO |
| Christian Ward |
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Christian Ward is a UK-based writer who has recently appeared in the Rappahannock Review, South Florida Poetry Journal, The Dewdrop, Dodging the Rain, Wild Greens, Mad Swirl, Dipity Literary Magazine, Impspired, and Streetcake Magazine.
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Christian Ward
ISBN: 9788119228706
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